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Question: A poem I wrote!.!.!. help me complete the last line!?
Girls in white dresses would dance through the fields
picking armfuls of daisies, a portrait of youth!.
Soldiers in uniform now march through the fields
blood staining the little white flowers in bloom!.
Girls in black dresses ____ through the fields
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I can't think of a graceful way to word the girls being part of the funerals for the soldiers, following the caskets or something!. Can someone help me out!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Girls in black dresses trudge through the fields
the daises now withered, a portrait of sorrow!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Girls in white dresses would dance through the fields
picking armfuls of daisies, a portrait of youth!.
Soldiers in uniform now march through the fields
blood staining the little white flowers in bloom!.
Girls in black dresses stride through the fields
Watching the soldiers be placed in the field!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Girls in black dresses transcend through the fields
!.!.!.surrounding their lost lovers in caskets!.
sorry!.!. I cannot do justice to your writing but I could stop myself from adding a word and a thought!.!.!. for you to twist about and play with!.!. maybe inspire you to finish it finally!.!.
it will come together for you well enough once you define what you are portraying!.!.!. perhaps in the wee hours of the morning when your brain suddenly wakens with an idea!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Girls in white dresses would dance through the fields
picking armfuls of daisies, a portrait of youth!.
Soldiers in uniform now march through the fields
blood staining the little white flowers in bloom!.
Girls in black dresses flew through the fields
to see their loves at strenght and real!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
"pass over hallowed ground, shedding their tears!."
I hope it helps you on your way!.
I would also suggest you change "little" to something like "delicate"Www@QuestionHome@Com
Mourn throught the fields
Wilting the poor daisies who once dance with youth or Wilting the flowers who've caught in their clutch!.
Something like that, lol/
Good LuckWww@QuestionHome@Com
Girls in black dresses:
mournfully graze
sullenly dance
through the fieldsWww@QuestionHome@Com
Move through the fields
Armful of prayers, with somber faces!.
Meh, hope I helped, stay strong!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Blood stains little white flowers in bloom
girls in black dresses grieve tears through the fields
mourn
screamWww@QuestionHome@Com
Girls in black dresses glide through the fields
Spreading petals of roses upon the graven ground ?Www@QuestionHome@Com
Girls in black dresses weep through the fields
Shadowing the high held caskets of soldiers!.
I hope this helps!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Girls in black dresses,
mournfully tread,
through out the fields,where
soldiers lay !.!.!.!.Dead!Www@QuestionHome@Com
mourn thruough the fieldsWww@QuestionHome@Com
mourn through the fieldsWww@QuestionHome@Com
march through the feildsWww@QuestionHome@Com
sympathize through the fieldWww@QuestionHome@Com
symbolize death on the feilds!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
mourn!?Www@QuestionHome@Com