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Question: A new poem!.!.feedback plz!?
Broken Promises!.!.!.
Yesterday's goals, dim memories!.
Dark saddened eyes, blurring with tears!.
Painful scars borne; Love's history!.
Futures crumble when doubt appears!.
No brightly lit hope envisioned,
When following after harsh words!.
Hurt soul splits in twain, partitioned!.
Swooned by appeal - when numbness lured!.
Apologies made, never bought!.
Price paid turned out far too costly!.
Though never known what would be wrought -
Must walk into the night softly!.
One wish, only to be released!.
Granted - now receive this token!.
Words written in rhyme, love's deceased!.
When promises made !. !. !. were broken!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
you know yesterday I found out that my boyfriend cheated and i damn near wanted to kill myself but than i read you poem and desided not to be so greedy but to note that this stuff happens to everyone so this poem was inspirital to me keep righting and if you could write one for me cause I am no good at that!. My best friend has been there the most for me and I just need something to make her feel appricated if you know what I mean!.!.!.!.!. so my email is queenmafiaprincess@yahoo!.com if you could do that for me that would be great thanks and I will vote for you and your poem if you deside to enter itWww@QuestionHome@Com
This is indeed about any promises,
that were broken
as well as dreams shattered
First line Yesterday's goals
I would have said history
but I see you already have love's history
Broken promises can be devastating
This can also result in lack of communication
and trust!.
I like the line apologies made never bought
here this is because it never came from the heart
and to mean
Your poem said it when promises made!.!.!. were brokenWww@QuestionHome@Com
Yes, this one works!. Nice job!.Www@QuestionHome@Com