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Question: How's my quick poem!?
what are the things i wait for if i'm always blue
what are feelings for if i can't be with you

waiting for the love that was mean't to come back, i'm awaiting that day
if a tragic heart had wings i'd be flying away



for a life time of happiness i would give up with you, you ask and i'm sure
so much more things hurt more than a broken heart it's just the only thing i've enduredWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
So I like it!. Especially the first four line!. Keep up the work!. :-)Www@QuestionHome@Com

quick is and adjective to describe it well, eh!?
lol =]
maybe better and more thorough adjectives!.

but just being my critical self!.

but its actually a good poem, sends a good message through!.
you'd have to absorb first, try to get things across the board more easily!.

hope I helped, even a little bit!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Yeah, don't listen to Lil Wayne!. Maybe he should quit his day job and maybe learn a little English!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

If this is serious, then it certainly needs more work!.Www@QuestionHome@Com