..what do you think..?..i just wrote this poem??..??

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a pretty flower!.
by caitlyn ham!.

a seed!.
a seed gets planted into the ground!.
by a hopeful little girl!.
she buries it and begins to water it daily!.
it begins to sprout!.
she smiles!.
it's a gorgeous green and slowly grows!.
little by little it gets taller!.
she prays that the flower will be strong and beautiful!.
one day it gently begins to open!.
she giggles!.
and sniffs the flower!.
wrinkles her nose!.
watches a beautiful bee buzzes!.
wow!.
what a pretty flower!.
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For your age, it's pretty good!. However, I do have some suggestions!. Maybe you should describe the flower more to put a picture into the reader's mind!. Because if you do that, then the poem would be more effective on the reader overall!. Plus, you should be less straightforward to put more depth into this poem!.

Besides that, it's a good start, and I'm interested to see how your writing will develop into in a few years!. :]

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this is realllly good for an 11 year old! seriously!.
but i think it could use a little more work and there's no point really to the poem, maybe you could relate it to the little girl or something like that!?
but nice jobbb you are a great writer and for sure by the time you're a bit older you'll be an amazing writer!

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Hehe l like it!.!.!.my guess is you have read Chicken Soup before!?That is a good book for people to love creative writing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com