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Question: Is this a good haiku!?
Snow falls silently!.
The presents are opening!.
It is Christmas time!.

i wrote this wen i was younger
tell me if its good
im planning to do something with it for christmas ^^Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
it's cute ^_^ i like it!.


[to the guy at the bottom Vlad something:]
it's her poem, she wrote it and she can do whatever she wants with it!. i personally think the "snow falls silently" is better in a more simple way and blends well w/ the rest of the haiku!.
if you want to keep your "snow comes in silence" then make your own haiku!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Well, I think it is okay, but to improve the flow, I think you should omit the end stopping in this poem!. Because a haiku suppose to have a unified and complete thought!. Plus, I think you should just describe the snow alone in this haiku in order to stay within the nature theme!.

Nevertheless, it is a good start!. :]Www@QuestionHome@Com

The point of a haiku is to say something big, in something small, instead of presents, try something with family, because we all know that xmas shouldn't be about presents!. right!? I sure hope so!. Stay Strong!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Haiku, 5 sylables, 7 then five!. You have three complete sentences!. Try three images in one sentence!. The whole thing must stand as a single vision!.

Snow was heavenly
as gifts were gladly opened
to mind us of Christ!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Its a good poem!.
Though if yu want to read to someone then you should add and take off something
For enstice:

Snow falls silently

Change it to:
Snow comes, in silenceWww@QuestionHome@Com

in my opinion it was okay!.!.!.its not bad!.!.!.!.
but it could still use improvement!.Www@QuestionHome@Com