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Question: Two Brothers!.!.!.!.One Night!.!.!.!.poem, tell me wah tyou think!?
Tears freeze on my face in the middle of Summer,
My skin is freezing as my heart is now ice,
The loved I had was taking away,
And that one cold summer night!.

Like a breathe of fresh air I never received,
It's not funny to be this far away,
I'm sailing on a ship that lost in the sea,
Your love I can never replace,

Oh brother you are the only one,
Who was there to keep me strong,
But as the days get old and cold,
I turn a relise God's not the one!.

For to late I've been all my life,
So maybe I can find answers within a knife
Don't look down at me and think,
'what a pity he could have been me'

So long to you my one true friend,
You are my poem in the end,
Like a brother should a brother would,
Go in battles for you, but I'm not strong enough to win!.!.!.


My brother died in a drunken driver hit and run!.!.!.still havent found the guy!!Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
aww yes that`s very sad, and you expressed what you`re going through with a poem!. The cold represents much in this poem, it especially represents how your`e feeling after the loss!.

That`s therapeutic!. I really hope you feel better soon since it seems you two very close!.

I pray you get well!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

it is very interesting I like the understory you can tell that there is some personal and some fictional parts I think with a little tweaking it could be very good!.

Have u ever thought of a poem kind of happier/sadder where it has a deep contrast!? Where every other line contradicts each other!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

oh, its kinda goodWww@QuestionHome@Com