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Question: Poem!.!.!.tell me what you think!!?
Tell me what you think please,
Hey, bother don't you spell the words right,
You've been up counting sheep to find sleep!.
But you've never had the time or the encouragement,
And before it's to late you will be dead in your grave!.
Like a fish bowl you swim around all day,
Looking for the answers for the things you don't say,
And even if you knew the right words you would,
Still end up exactly where you are!.
So by the time passes us by what will you learn,
I will learn that love is **** and the world is terrible!.
Like a bad disease love creeps into me,
Holding my blood cells ransom, for a taste of heartache!.
It's all been said before, a million different ways,
Love is a game and I've lost the instructions,
But it's still fun to play and grow attached and live knowing,
One day you will feel this heartache!.
And my parents were on a traveling show,
So I grew up as a traveling man,
But I have never been overseas,
My destinations my mind, but I'm standard at my knees!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I dig it, the use of words is great, my only suggestion is try breaking up the lines a little, so it looks more like a poem, instead of a paragraph!. But ultimately its yours!. Stay Strong!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like this!. It is very unique--I've never heard anything like it!.

My only critique is the line: "But I have never been overseas"!. It is a fine line, but I just question the necessarity of it!?Www@QuestionHome@Com