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Question: My love story, I don't really like it, but its a cute story anyway, what do you think!?
Together we lost,
Our adolescent innocence!.
Together we fought
The aching world!.
Hand in hand we stood!.
In uniforms of the marching band,
Highschool started our love story,
Only life can end it!.
The moon was framed,
By stadium bleachers,
As we hid away,
To a young lovers paradise!.
Your lips put to mine,
Your back arched, my toes tipped!.
We drifted in harmony,
As our hearts beat all the faster!.
My head was filled,
With delusions of love,
We said empty words
Meaning every one!.
Together we found
Our place in life
Together we prayed
For another chance!.
We've made a life
After graduation,
And we still stand
Hand in hand!.
Ring on my finger
Head on your shoulders!.
Life is rough,
And living is sweet!.
Our love is flawed,
As is humanity!.
Yet I still believe
In our moonlit kiss!.
Love is a lesson,
Together we learn
To make happiness,
For oursleves, and eachother!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Very nice!. always keep writing and learning and being influenced and experimenting!. All key factors in improving everyones poetry!. Never think think you can not improve, i always cringe when i read peoples comments on here saying "omg this is perfect, you are amazing, get this published"
It makes me wonder does anyone on this site actually read poetry!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
It shows me that you are self aware!. It tells a story!. It shows you as a romantic!. It shows poetry can be powerful even when it's simple!. (clap clap clap) !.!.!. there maybe a few things you could change but I'm not going to criticise!.!.!. it's not that important!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
i love it! very deep, powerful, meaningful and moving!
thanks for the points and great read!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Beautiful love poem! A summarized love tell from beginning to end!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
one word-SPLENDIDWww@QuestionHome@Com
amazing!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Sorry, to goofy for me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
TLDRWww@QuestionHome@Com
its very good and very inspiring for young people in loveWww@QuestionHome@Com
That is really good!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
This is poetic like a inggot of goldWww@QuestionHome@Com
That was reallllllly good! I loved it! Cute story too!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
nice:))Www@QuestionHome@Com