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Question: My first I am poem, what do you think!?
I come from a broken family
Full of broken dreams
I am the result of a
Grown nightmare child!.
I was the marriage counselor
For my parents!. I was the something new
For my mother's wedding day;
On an April day
In a quiet trailor park!.
The bump that was my life,
Under the blue fabric
Of her shot-gun-wedding dress!.
I come from the epitome of white trash!.
I am your terrible treasure, mom!.
I sentenced you life, with my dad!.
He's not that bad,
If not for his hurtful words,
We would be a family!.
I am a genious!.
I come from nothing!.
I live off of nothing!.
But I am your prophet!.
If Jesus is your homeboy,
I am your saint!.
My words move more
than your lazy ***
on that potato-crumb-filled couch!.
I am humble enough to admit my arrogance,
For I am the misstress of revolution!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
wow!.

either u have a wild imagination

or

a very suck-ish childhood!.

IT WAS !. !. !. MOVING!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

emotional distress is your embodied pollution
promotional death seems the only solution

these problems form a blade that surely cuts
leaving your broken heart in the deepest ruts

i know the pain and nothing you will gain
an unmistakable stain fills your heart like rain

short and sweetWww@QuestionHome@Com

its good but u should break it up into different parts so when u say i am that should start a new stanza but other than that its pretty goodWww@QuestionHome@Com

yea thats really good!. I agree seperate the I am's into stanzasWww@QuestionHome@Com

its good but i agree with others break it upWww@QuestionHome@Com