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Question: What do you think of my new poem!. Hope, Faith and Charity!?
Hi, Please provide helpful critique and helpful tips to inprove this poem or what errors/meter issues need to be fixed!.
Thanks cheers!. : )
Hope, Faith and Charity!.
Hope is to wish we find true love,
Faith is the belief that we do,
Charity is love and hugs that we give,
Smiles and laughter ------shared between two,
Charity is the donation of love that we give,
Raising smiles and laughter for those who in need,
Who’s desperately deprived of loves happiness,
It’s free to donate and to receive as a gift!.
Cherish to hold, spirit turned gold,
Let beauty within, you shine,
Nothing in this world is worth more than gold,
Than the love between you and I!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
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Lovely sentiment!. I think it's really good and a great way to start, but I was left feeling like it was incomplete!. I'd like to see more and maybe in a way that provides continuity in which you give a stanza to each: Hope, Faith, and Charity following the first!.
Hope is to wish we find true love,
Faith is the belief that we do,
Charity is love and hugs that we give,
Smiles and laughter ------shared between two,
Stanza about Hope!.!.!.
Stanza about Faith!.!.!.
Stanza about Charity!.!.!.
Then a final stanza that provides a conclusion!.!.!.
Just my opinion and suggestion to use as you see fit!.
Write on :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
Nice poem here
I like the name faith hope and charity
I also like how each section is divided
however there is one part of the title missing
cherish
In other words faith hope charity and cherish!.
I see much written out for hope charity and cherish!.
this talks about belief which is faith
Charity is about giving or donating
but its also love
just like the cherish!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Hope, Faith, and Charity/Love, but the greatest of these is Love!. That much you make ever so clear in your poem!. I also like how one builds upon the other in your verse!.
"Faith is the substance of things HOPED for!." Faith breeds hope, love springs from hope!. This you have captured, and nothing is more beautiful than the triad of faith, hope, and love!.
Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I'm not an editor, but I think nothing needs fixed!. It's great, and it gives a warm feeling!. I like it a lot!. It's beautiful!.!.!.!. nothing like my piece of crap!.!.!.!.!. http://answers!.yahoo!.com/question/index;!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I like it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
aww its sweet and has great dynamics!Www@QuestionHome@Com
It's all over the place!. Try following this pattern!.
Hope is to wish we find true love,
faith, the belief that we do!.
Charity's gift comes from above,
a kiss is shared between two!.
Charity is the love we give,
to those apart from the throng!.
They, too, have but one life to live,
so fill their sad heart with song!.
Cherish to hold, spirit turned gold,
let beauty within you shine!.
Never too young, never to old,
a 'feast' on which we can dine!.
Yes, it's total pants, but I'm trying to listen to "I'm sorry, I haven't a clue" on the radio (it's a documentary about neonman), so that's all the time I can devote to it!. You can take it from here!.
Thanks for the flattery (irony, perhaps!?), but, C'MON!.!.!.it still needs major polishing and refining!. That's your job, so get to it!.
(Pssst! You really shouldn't say nice things about me, you know!. Some folk won't like you for it!. YOU won't even like you for it!.)Www@QuestionHome@Com