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Question: What do you think of this poem!? (written by a 15 year old)!?
Any constructive poem would be appreciated :]
also a possible title!?

Thank you!.




Our blind love constantly comes to mind, love!.
You and I combined, you and I intertwined!.
We were designed to be a perfect kind!.

With you, I was in bliss,
With every touch and every kiss!.
This can’t be dismissed, since my feelings still persist!.
I know it's dumb of me to keep doing this,
To constantly reminisce!.

You always manage to be in my line of vision,
You and me as a beautiful collision!.
I wish I didn’t make such a ****** up decision!.

I just want the world to reset because losing you is my one regret!.
I’m upset, and I just want to forget!.
Give me the alcohol and the cigarettes!.

No, I don’t want to forget a single emotion
Or both of our devotions despite outside commotion!.
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Although I seem to be sedating and innovating,
I actually am hating that I keep on restating
How I’m still hoping and waiting!.

But I swear I’ll always care!.
We’ve been through enough despairs and scares,
And I hope you’re aware that I’ll be there!.
You are my air, no one else even compares!.

We act as if we’re through,
But I really hope that isn’t true,
We were a perfect two,
And so badly do I want to be with you!.

No matter what it costs,
My optimism will not soon exhaust
Because I don’t believe that all hope is lost!.
I’m keeping my fingers crossed!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Wow that was very good!.!. and very nice rhyming!.!. I have poetic friends that their writing cant even touch that! and their in highschool! :)

as for a title what about "I'll always be there" or "you and I" or something like "with hope"

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its rlly niceWww@QuestionHome@Com