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Question: Pleas rate my poem its my first!?
i hope u like i am not used to writing poems this is my first poem umm i just wrote it i was not thinking of someone or pain or anything i just wrote it :d
as the sun rises are eyes finaly meet
my hart stops pumping from the happieness with in me , altho the pain and hurt cant go down ,but as i look with in me i sea you i sea hope i sea faith i sea love ,i look past the pain and hurt, that i have been throw altho it was hard but when i looket in ur eyes i was fulled and driend with love and hope and as i speac i know that u are mine and i am yours , until are eyes meat aging il be waiting , il waiting for you the end i know some words are not right but try to read it pleasWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I like it, and your really good for a first time poet!. Some of the grammar confuses me though because I'm not sure if you purposely misspelled something, or did it accidentallyWww@QuestionHome@Com
it 's ok, some words could be touched up for readers to decipher better, practice format and have fun,?
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listening to lights ~drive my soul,
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It sounds more like a little hurt/love letter than a poem!. But it's very expressive anyway!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
it's rubbish
i could say it means something but i'ld be lieing coz apparently it doesnt mean anything to you
you "just wrote it" so it doesnt make any sense to meWww@QuestionHome@Com
First correct grammar and punctuation, then we will talk!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
TERRIBLE RUBBISH WEIRD MAKES NO SENSE!!!!
KEEP WORKING RIGHT NOW YOU ARE NOT GONNA BE A POET FOR SUREWww@QuestionHome@Com