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Question: Critique My Poem !.!.!. Do You Really Love Me!?
I wonder you really love me
I wonder you care
In your eyes lay a mystery
My eyes can not see
In your heart there is a secret
I wish you reveal
When you giggle
I am swept by wonderment
In oceans so deep
Please tell me
So simple and sweet
Do you really love me!?
Do you really care!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
This is so good!. You have been studying!. I can tell!. I love you, I do!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
yes i love you!. of course i love you!. why would i be doing this but for love!. like a dove!. a peaceful symbol is my heart!. and with you in it!. we'll never be apart!. thanks!. thanks!. for the moment's we've shared!. thanks some more for the moment you're scared!. me being the one to come make you feel warm!. i'll suffer all the punishment!. all the scorn!. and be reborn!. but once with you!. this life is ending!. and we are trueWww@QuestionHome@Com
short -- sweet -- to the point
keep up your writing, only be practice will you refine it to the best that it can be and you are well on your way!. Feel what you write and make it come alive!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
It is nicely put together, but I do not exactly feel the true emotion behind it!.!.Almost "too pretty" where it sounds a bit clique!.Www@QuestionHome@Com