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This is a cool read Semper!.

Minor suggestion: Consider mentioning love only at the begining and the end of the poem!. Like so:

Love don't live here!
Threw its clothes in a Gucci bag,
Clicked heels to a taxi cab!.
Daggers thrown from it's iris!.
Couldn't dock,
Had the port blocked like a pirate!.
Swashbuckled, snacthed loot and skipped!.
Came equipped,
Spit venom from her lips!.
Love don't live here!.

You could also choose to put a break between your last line setting it off alone!.!.!.that might bring additional emphasis--something to think about!.

Best,

ToddWww@QuestionHome@Com

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Very effective imagery, rhyme and meter (irregular), but the typo in line 7 needs to be corrected (snacthed) and lines 2 and 4 have a grammatical error (it's is the contraction of it + is)!.

It's interesting that love isn't gendered until line 9 (her lips), though the imagery implies that love is female!. The pronouns referring to love until line 9 are all neutral (its)!. I wonder if this was planned!. !. !.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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I like it just like it is!. Only one thing, the pirate should have made her walk the plank! Thanks!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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please end with love lives every where
your poem is excellent
you kindly add some emotion and mix with laugh,you will find it super excellentWww@QuestionHome@Com

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Nice Poem! Semper Fi!
You are very talented!. Do you ever try to publish your Poems!? I know its hard to publish books of poetry but different magazines accept them!. Good luckWww@QuestionHome@Com

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Lovely love, you sweet sweet dove
fly away, go away and stay away
for your love is not my love!

Well said!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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You've described the absence of real love perfectly!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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A good poem Semper Fi!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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This one is modern and sophisticated, very rare for Marine life!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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