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Question: Whaddya think of my humble poem!?
The following poem has 7 verses, so I will have to add them bit by bit!. Please wait 'til all 7 are on display before submitting comments, thanks!.

LIFE'S HARD

Life's hard when you're nothing
to someone you 'like',
it's tough when their silence
means "go take a hike"!.
Life's grim when they'd promised
that they'd keep in touch,
it's rough when their silence
says ever so much!.

Life's hard when they're always
foremost in your mind,
it's tough when their silence
is all that you find!.
Life's harsh when they'd seemed like
the 'friend' you had sought,
it's rough when their silence
shouts "don't care a jot"!.

Life's hard when you've tasted
of pleasure so rare,
it's tough when their silence
brings naught but despair!.
Life's bare when you look back
on that 'special' day,
it's rough when their silence
yells "nothing to say"!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Yes, I've been in this place and it's damn hard indeed to take a dear friend's rejection when they so easily neglect something (the relationship) that you hold so dear!. It is life changing in its impact in your life!.

This is beautifully said!.!.!.!.a wonderful poem!Www@QuestionHome@Com

This poem speaks such truth!.

I know it all to well,

Absolutely fantastic so realistic so inspiring so poetic!.

Truly a very show of outstanding talent, Please continue on with your writing it's very good!. it's not a waste of time and don't listen to what others say they are not the writer you are and besides I Love it!.

If you like check out some of mine I think I still have them on here!. if not than don't worry about it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I liked the poem very much, the first part before you added any was my favorite, honestly you could end it at nothing to say or keep going, and either way would be great!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

And so---------A life of living experience, well said, Kudos!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

What coul say to you!? It′s simply amazing!.

Saludos de alguien DeMENTE!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it except for the "don't care a jot!." But otherwise its good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

its a good peom but you need to be more positive and not dwell on your heartachesWww@QuestionHome@Com

Very nicely put, i think all of us feel this way at times in our lives!.
You have a great gift! Good luck!Www@QuestionHome@Com

That was great!. The rhymes were nice and not cheesy at all!. The content is very true too!.


Well done, I give it a 10!Www@QuestionHome@Com

cool so far!.!.!.!.I suppose you've gone through something like that!. However, that's why we shouldn't centre our life on a person!.!.!.!.people always disappoint us!.!.!.I'll wait for the rest of your poem now!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i think its a little to thought out!.
i can tell time was put into it though!.
keep going!.
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This is a very good portrayal of the kind of friendships that break one-sidedly!. Believe me, I've been there!. Anyway, it's good; but I'm not going to gush!.

The rhyming is clever!. Mostly!. I don't like the "don't care a jot", it's a bit awkward and jumps out at you instead of flowing effortlessly!.

In general the poem is good, but you need to revise it a little to make it great!. Chop fearlessly, and before you know it, you'll have produced a work of art!.

(By the way, I disagree with someone who said your poem is "too thought out"; that's the way a poem is supposed to be, it doesn't write itself on the paper!. If people didn't put any thought into what they wrote, the world would be full of very bad poetry!.)Www@QuestionHome@Com