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Question: POEM 2, good or bad!?
GIVING YOU ALL MY LOVE
I have loved before
I promise I love you more
Other loves are just friends
Our love will never end
What is it that we feel!?
Love between two people thats real
Anyone can look at us and say it won't last
I can prove that wrong real fast
When you talk to me my body is light
My body tingles and it feels all right
My heart is lifted and I cry
I'm in love with you and know why
I will hold your heart as long as you have mine
A broken path finally in a straight line
Hold hands and never let go
Kiss and the love will show
We'll be together and never fall out of love
Because the title of this poem above
Shows you I am giving you all my love!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Very good that has to be one of the best poems I have read in awhile!. Keep writting and the grade I would give you for this poem is an A+!. Take care!. =)Www@QuestionHome@Com
it's ok, it's easy to follow!.
but it is so cliched!.
pretty much every poem out there is cliched, just because people tend to write about the same things!. next time, try writing about something else, maybe a metaphor of love, instead of just plain love!.
you expressed your emotion beautifully, but it just doesn't seem to flow as well as it should!.
keep at it though, you have some potential!.
but this wasn't the best poem i've heard!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Is too elemental for me, too basic!. Needs some arrangements!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
not so goodWww@QuestionHome@Com