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Question: Does this do the others justice!?
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#5
Opening the file
only map to my new target
I shuffled through
frustrated
‘couldn’t they ever
organize!’
Damn, no photo
I would have like,
at least, to know
what this man looked like
‘A name!
Was there a name!?’
I searched…!.!.
There is was!
‘Kay!?’…!.
-I hope that it is clear that ‘Kay’ is the name… I wish I could go back and make some minor changes to the first few… only to make the twist more cohesive!. What do you think of this installment!?
Blessed Be in True Love… or not, SirenWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Ooops glad you added the rest, LOL because I had missed 2-4 , so will go back and read the rest! BRB then will be able to make a more intelligent comment!
So am I right when thinking the twist is instead of a man she is looking for, it is now a woman instead, or did I get lost with the clutter of the office!? Cheers !!Www@QuestionHome@Com
This was obviously hastily written, that accounts for the little grammer and word switch issues!. Thank you for clarifying that "Kay" is the name, otherwise I would think she was saying the short version of "Okay!." Yes, this does the others justice!. I love the fact that we have a late assassin and a disorganized company!. However, my intrigue button has definitely been pressed!. I want to meet Kay!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Hi Siren,
A couple comments and suggestions to consider:
Opening the file
The map to my new target
I shuffled frustrated
‘couldn’t they ever
organize!’
A few minor changes in that section!. Do with them what you will!.
Damn! No photo!.
I would have liked,
at least, to know
what this man looked like
‘A name!
Was there even a name!?’
I searched…!.!.
There it was!
‘Kay!?’…!.
A few minor changes!.!.!.keep em coming!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I figured you meant "Kay" as in a name!. I've read 1-5 and I too am looking forward to meeting Kay!. Very interesting scenario you have going here and great cliff hanger!. I'll be looking for #6!. I'll try to get to the series I missed during my quiet time after everyone has gone to bed and e-mail you afterward, Kay !? hehehe!.!.!.Okay!? ;)Www@QuestionHome@Com
Hmm mysterious "Kay"!. Anything like M out of the Bond series or is it!.!.!.!.no, won't go the spoiler!.!.!.but I am thinking Crying Game here!. But I will wait!. Yes good build up - less dramatic than before but still laying the foundations!.
Do Charlotte and Cara from the last SSO (I C a thread there) have something in common initially!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
"Kay"!? How very mysterious and enigmatic! I am as puzzled as ever, actually!. That, of course, is your trademark!. You always keep me guessing!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
IT IS GOOD!. WHO IS KAY!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
Kay!? Que sera'!? "There is was!." Now there might be some who would think this a simple typographical error, like leaving the 'd' off 'liked!.' But consider the possibility that this is Siren's way of dealing with the persistent ambiguity of time!. Just as a great musical philosopher of the mid-twentieth century posited the eternal conundrum of existence itself, "Is you is, or is you ain't!?" The author herself suggest the possibility of this being a similar inquiry into the Nature of the Universe by the peculiar use of the half-quote, 'Know what I mean!?' But the entire segment is written in the first person!. The entire passage emanates from the speaker, it's all a 'quote!.' I'm open to any explanation as to the purpose and logic of 'this!.'Www@QuestionHome@Com
I must admit I do not really understand the realm of poetry!. That is why I am here, to expand my horizons!. But this I find singularly disturbing!. You are glorifying death, making those who bring it your hero!. This I do not understand!. Death should be in God's hands alone!. It is not for us to decide!. And I don't think I like the fact that the person Charlotte is to seduce is named Kay!. There is questionable morals all over that!. I say this only because I worry for people like you, finding their way in the world!.Www@QuestionHome@Com