Demused-Evolution of Poet I
"I have
to leave!."
she slams
down her hand,
but she doesn't seem
angry!.
"But why,
we worked
so well
together!."
"It's not me!."
she claims!.
"It's you!.
You've changed!."Www@QuestionHome@Com
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"I have to leave!." she slams down her hand, but she doesn't seem angry!. "But why, we worked so well together!." "It's not me!." she claims!. "It's you!. You've changed!."Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Love that ironic last stanza!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Ah, okay, so it is a series!. You end your lines in odd places, it makes your work not flow correctly!. Each line break is like a pause, and I believe that it cuts up your poems in the wrong places!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Again, you have done a huge volume of work with a modicum of words of phrases!. The doors available from here make the reader wait for the next to open!.Www@QuestionHome@Com This begins in a startling way!. I find the title to be fascinating, giving subtle hints as to where this may go!. I am already captivated!. On I read! Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com |