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Lanturne poetry

The Lanturne is a five-line verse shaped like a Japanese lantern with a syllabic pattern of one,
two, three, four, one!.


Rising Floods

Floods
Rising
Threatening
Communities
Flee

Celebration

Wine
Sparkling
Lovable
Chateau Margaux,
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I love them and I 'll have to try this interesting form! I almost wish you had posted them separately, as each is so complete in and of itself!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I am not sure about the ending; I tend to think of `wine/sparkling' as a frivolous and celebratory taste, but Margaux as a much more serious taste which is perhaps too contemplative for celebration!. `Pop' and `Lovable' do not quite reconcile this gap for me!.

Will a half-glass of Chateau d'Yquem suffice!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Cute, but also borderline trite!. A flood is just too big a subject for this minimalist style!. The celebration one is better, but still vexing for its banality!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Actually, the two of these go very well together; they create kind of an uneasy feeling contrasting the fleeing communities and the people celebrating elsewhere!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Yes, these are not only perfected, they are wondeful!. I have never seen this poetic form before, and I am intrigued!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Little do I know about this style of writing!. But it seems the beauty of poetry and reading interest is just not there for me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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Very nice!.!.!.great corrections!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Go Gal! They are great! I love this form! You do it so well!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Yes very nice even if I did like the other one , this one is even better!! Keep them coming !! Cheers !!!Www@QuestionHome@Com