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Question: Life's a B*tch & then u plumit!!?
When ur man leaves u
For some1 worse than u
When a big party's happenin
But u have nothin new
Life's a B*TCH
When u study for a test
But u fail anyway
When ur worst enemy just
Spoils ur whole day
Life's a B*TCH
When ur bestfriend bad mouths u
Behind ur back
And tells all ur secrets to
Tom, Dick & Jack
Life's a B*TCH
When ur man leaves u
For HIS best friend
Cause he says he's gettin somethin
From the other end
Life's a B*TCH
When they tell u that u're ugly
And u know it's true
But only this person's
More ugly than u
Life's a B*TCH
But don't study it honey
stay on the right track
And anything they do you
Just do them back
An eye for an eye
And a tooth for a tooth
A shoe is a shoe and a Boot is a boot
Walk in the dance with your last year clothes
Call to the crowd and strike up a pose
People might say
"ain't that her last years' outfit!?"
But if it don't bother you then don't study it
You can't please everyone
Most people will say,
But if it pleases you
Then get on with your day!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Unfortunately there are those who critique while having a commonly found sweeping implement firmly embedded in one of the body's lower orifices!. Don't plummet, and don't prune it either!. These are the lyrics to a song!. Logic must take a backseat to the driving musicality and to the emotions!. This is buc, u dun gud!Www@QuestionHome@Com
I liked it , but think you should not abbreviate your words, but yes did like it especially this part!
Walk in the dance with your last year clothes
Call to the crowd and strike up a pose
People might say
"ain't that her last years' outfit!?"
But if it don't bother you then don't study it
You can't please everyone
Most people will say,
But if it pleases you
Then get on with your day!
Now I shall get on with my day, or should I say evening !!! Cheers!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Unimaginative, badly written and subjegated, non-emtion and false flow, very hard to read, take another shot at it, use more concise wording!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I actually liked this quite a bit!. I don't like how often you repeated that phrase, and I think you could even give this a different theme!.!.!. instead of "life being a *****" maybe you could make it more about being empowered and rising above what others think of you!? At least, that's the vibe I got!. But I do like your rhyming, and the flow!. Usually I hate rhyming poems, so good job!.
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hahaha I THOUGHT those might be song lyrics!. My friend and I once found a piece of notebook paper with something about "slob on my knob like corn on the cob" and cracked up because we thought someone was writing erotic poetry!.!.!.!.!. but it was just a rap song!.
Sigh!.!.!.!. what are we teaching children with lyrics like that!? Are we giving them any hope!? It's one thing to have that as a poem, an individuals point of view, but another thing completely to have it broadcast on the airwaves as what listeners should accept and expect!.
Life's only a ***** if you make it that way!.Www@QuestionHome@Com