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Question: Did you know that I was once a rapper!? What do you think of this positive rap from long ago I wrote!?
Death Express
Written by Koye AKA Semper Fi Reborn
Ay yo, this is a train that a fool would ride!.
If ya purchase a ticket,
You'll be paying on your suicide!.
The conductor's name is Crack,
The engineer is named Fiend!.
Your first stop is a town called Morphine!.
What kind of dope uses dope!?
Praying for a hit, you should be praying for hope!
You see a dealer and you can't refuse,
The poisons he always gets you to use!.
You rode the train all around the nations,
And you deny you need rehabilitation!.
You had a job,
You were headed for success!.
You sold it all for a ticket on the Death Express!
And it was easy, there's a booth on every corner!.
You can purchase any ride that ya wanna!.
The hardcore fiends even sell their bodies!.
The high class get high and act snotty!.
ALL ABOARD! We're leaving by eight!.
Rich, poor, black, white,
Death won't discriminate!.
NOTE**
Just a little for your critique!. I wrote this in 1989!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
And to think, most raps that you listen to these days are about the wonders of drugs and rampant sexuality!. Thank you for not going with the trend!. I especially love (poetically speaking) the last line of your first stanza!. There is no drug so powerful as hope, no fix as devastating as love!. Thanks Koye AKA Semper Fi Reborn, for reminding us which train we should ride!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Wow Semper FI THIS IS REALLY AWESOME AND SO TRUE !.I think your rap was a head of the game as crack and drugs are still ruining peoples life's and helping kids and others lose hope as i did myself long ago!.!.!.Keep speaking the truth and take care my friend!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I think it would be an interesting rap to death metal crossoverWww@QuestionHome@Com
That's awesome semper, you should play it for high school kids, influence them in the right direction!.!.!.good work!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Would you like to see this on Mars!? We need some entertainment on that long, nine-month journey!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Gotta agree with E!. What a great piece! Thanks!.Www@QuestionHome@Com