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Question: Good poem bad poem!?
An open eye stares into blue sky
Stay unmoving as images flash by
Unconscious blinking as time passes
Concentration diluted, a mind expresses
A feeling of love, never enough
Tender lips await through tough
In reality it does not exist,
The real feeling of her rosy lips
Kisses parted, for another
They touch nothing, not even each other!.
One slow final blink, back into reality
A picturesque dream forced to fatality
Surreal place of being, a dreamlike state
Noticing now, that it was all fake!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
That poem was seriously catchy!. It gives beautiful imagery which you then you flash it back to show that it was all just a fantasy and not how reality is actually like :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
'rawwr' poems do NOT have to rhyme!
One of the ways to completely annoy any poet is to comment on how it doesnt rhyme!.
I think it's a really good poem :DWww@QuestionHome@Com
excellent poem (:
although passes and expresses doesn't really rhyme, does it!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
Very good poem, I like the slant rhymes!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Pretty good!Www@QuestionHome@Com
very good
i especially liked the endWww@QuestionHome@Com
"!.!.!.it was all fake"
really good!Www@QuestionHome@Com