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Question: What do think of this poem!.!?
When all you have is the knife to your skin
When all you think is “I cant be with him”

All you want is to touch his face!.
And live your love with happiness and grace!.

your tears run down your cheeks!.
As you see the blood leak!.

Down to the floor!.
And you open door!.
To relief
As well as grief!.

What subsides the pain is the blade
And how your arm aches!.

You hate yourself for loving him!.
Because It wrong and you cant even tell him!.

Can I heel the pain!?
And become sane again!?

Should I live or die!?
When all I do is cry!.

Or should i just keep marking my skin!?
And make the biggest mistake of my life…a sin!.

To Die or live!?
When all you have is the blade to your skin!.



i dont think the ending is great help me whit that and tell me your honest opinion on everything!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I like it!.
It's very good, and I can feel emotion as I read it!.
Anddd
The ending is okay, but I can't really think of anything to improve itWww@QuestionHome@Com

you must be feeling that bad huh!?
good but i'm not really comfortable with its msg!.!.it's so masacistic!.!.and juz an advice stop thinking of killing yourself!!! there are other people out there for you!.!.!.
but i do think you have talent though!.!.!.keep building it up!.!.!.and try writing other various colors of poetry!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

its alrightWww@QuestionHome@Com