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Question: Dark Poem for you!?
Darkness feels my every pore
hatred and wrath encrust my soul
I look for ways to even the score
to bring my self out of this endless hole
Punish them all he says to me
Everyone deserves it, on their knees
they'd do it to you, got to do it to them
never again let them see the light
grab with anger and hold on tight
Never regret it, until you get caught
replinish your soul, we evil bought
no one undestands you, no one ever will
so instead of living just kill kill kill



ps!.

i don't feel this way at all, but i just like to be able to show a diversity of poerty, instead of the people that always right about pretty kittys!.

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Yes, it is quite good!. finally someone who writes poetry that rhymes!. There are so many on here that don't understand what poetry really is!. Anyone can write down just words but it takes talent to make those words read in a poetic way to come together as a story while you are reading them!. You, no matter how dark your poem was!. Have the talent to do that You know, it would also make a good heavy metal song too!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Theres a couple of lines you failed to ryme correctly, maybe this is something you can work on, but I love the consept!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i thougth!.!. it was a beautiful piece!. True art that came from the soul!. Congrats on your awesome poem!Www@QuestionHome@Com

well it is dark and depressing but its oh so very good!. keep writing!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's a bit forced, and you need to learn to spell!. 'Darkness fills my every pore' would be a better 1st line!. How about!.!.!.!?

Cold darkness fills my ev'ry pore,
I live to even up the score!.
Hatred and wrath encrust my soul,
freeing me from this endless hole!.

A voice cries "punish them" to me,
and force them down on bended knee!.
They'd do you in, so do them first,
and prod and poke them 'til they burst!.

Withold from them the shining light -
grab with anger and hold on tight!.
Never regret it, don't get caught,
and sell your soul, it cost you nought!.

None understand, none ever will -
to hell with life!.!.!.just kill, kill, KILL!

This revision is far from perfect, of course, but it perhaps gives you something to work from!.Www@QuestionHome@Com