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Question: What do you think about this poem!? Be honest!!?
I'm 16 and love writing poetry and stories!.
Be honest, what do you think!?
Warning: Not Shakesphere lol!.!.!.!.!.
-Spoiled And Hurting-
As I scream "I hate my life"
I'm filled with utter rage
My mom screams back
"Stop whining"
"Grow up and act your age"
My eyes fill up with salty tears
As I watch one trickle down
I try my best to fight the twitch of an inevitable growing frown
I must resemble a spoiled brat as I spill my woeful tale
Boo hoo I'm lonely
Boo hoo I'm sad
What a surprise!
It's over a male!
In the eyes of the brave
In the eyes of the great
My troubles are a matter of greed
Yet in my own eyes, though not as noble or wise
Doesn't everybody bleed!?
Yes I'm not fighting world hunger
No my life is not on the line
Yet given both these
I cry on my knees
"That dosen't mean I'm fine!"Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I think it is an awesome poem nd so true!. Teenage love and heartache is incredibly painful and hideous and what you say it so true!. good on you! If you can out your thoughts and feelings in poetry you will go a long wayWww@QuestionHome@Com
Your poem reminds me of some my daughter wrote on many occasions!. It is very good and sounds true to your feelings!. When your feeling down writing sometimes helps!. Keep up the good work!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
first line is to be rectified
no body normally hate their life unless frustrated!.
you are not frustrated and of course intelegently written about your mom!.
you should add some satireWww@QuestionHome@Com
i really liked it!.!.!. i loved the very last line, it's really powerful!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
It's well rhymed!.
It also is a good description of the stereotypical teenage girl!. (Not meant to offend!.!.!.)Www@QuestionHome@Com
wow that was actually really meaningful nd welll written i like itWww@QuestionHome@Com
I like it!.
People feel that way and you wrote it in a unique way!.
It's cool!.
=)Www@QuestionHome@Com
i liked it!
it's very unique and interesting!.
good job!Www@QuestionHome@Com
i really really like it!.
very well writtenWww@QuestionHome@Com