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Question: Do like this short poem i wrote!?
this poem is something thought of and i just used my self in it

love vest

i used to have a vest on my chest not bullet proof but hurt proof one that wrap around your heart to keep it at a comfortable rest but the time came along when i open up and gave it a test will this help me rise above all are sink into the deepest depths are leave my heart out my chest my mind cofused and my body in a bloody messWww@QuestionHome@Com


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I think you hit on a lot of what people feel in general when they go out on a limb with love!. It would help the reading immensely if this was in a more standard poetry form with line breaks though!. Other than a few word choice issues here or there I thought it flowed pretty well and you kept it to the one subject!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I do like your idea and vision, however it is subjegated within the context and wording, which in turn makes it very hard to read, good attemp though!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

overall it's pretty good!.!.mihgt need editing though!.
how about mine!?
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I like it, I like it a lot but you need to include punctuation to make it easier to read!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I love itWww@QuestionHome@Com