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By Cynthia S!. Black hole, they say, was a star large, shining, seen from afar!. in a fit of age it exploded!. Fell into itself, it did hole with gravity for a lid No light letting out!. I expect I’ll explode someday one thing I have to pray don’t let me fall in on myself!. Let me be fireworks instead!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: My only criticism is the word exploded should be imploded!. Well done, my lady, well done indeed!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Your short poem is sweet!. I like the narrative!. I feel like that sometimes!.!.!.like my own world is caving in!.!.!. You were able to sum up a lot of emotion in a few words where many longer poems fail!. Well done!. A+Www@QuestionHome@Com Very different outlook - thank you!. Whether it be implosion or explosion - it probably will be beyond our control!. Our only mission is to - make it as beautiful and noteworthy as we can ?Www@QuestionHome@Com Your poem shows inspired thought and striking description!. I suggest leaving the word age and accepting Dondi's suggestion!.Www@QuestionHome@Com "Hi!" I agree to go out with a bang, I want to be a vibrant colour of space!. To display my existence!. of what once was!. Great poem Cheers : )Www@QuestionHome@Com May you be a roman candle perched atop a black cat stand exploding!.!.!. a thousand stars horizons light!.!.!. brigter nowWww@QuestionHome@Com "Not with a bang, but a whimper!." Don't want it that way!!Www@QuestionHome@Com I really enjoyed reading your poemWww@QuestionHome@Com Clever this is, it sparkles, I like it!. KudosWww@QuestionHome@Com It seems all the good people above me said it best!.!.!.!.!.!.!. Well done & nice job !.!.!.!.!.!.!.!. Have s great week!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com Work on the spelling!.!.!.but I liked it, actually!.Www@QuestionHome@Com 'Rage', not 'age'!. And it needs more punctuation!. Shows promise!. (Ah, I see!.!.!.'fit of age'!.!.!.it's a pun!.)Www@QuestionHome@Com |