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Position:Home>Poetry> I wrote a poem. comment plz =p?Question: I wrote a poem!. comment plz =p!? Weep, My Willow, Weep
Your branches sway for ones departure Watching as they leave their tracks behind Yet no one sees your soul caged In a thick ring of blistered wood Weep, My Willow, Weep Like dew on leaves, tears fall While insomniac animals scurry Whoosh, Whoosh, sweet lullaby Standing Still in everlasting sleep Weep, my Willow, WeepWww@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Beautiful! You need not change a thing unless you actually 'feel' it!. I loved it very much!. Poems have to be happy!.!.!.and poems have to be depressing!. We can never give up on any of the colors of life!. Be careful of what some people will tell you!. Trust in yourself!. Your poem really does work, believe me!. PeaceWww@QuestionHome@Com Wow, great!. At first I didn't think I would like it because I saw the repetition right away, but after I read the whole thing I changed my mind!. Good work!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I dunno, 1st stanza was better than the next!. but it is so direct and dark!. U lost control on the 2ND stanza!. Try some thing more imaginative & more intact!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Honestly i don't understand it!.!.!.then again i may be dumb : / O well an opinion is an opinionWww@QuestionHome@Com i thought it was beautiful! keep up the good work! =) if oyu want you can check out my poems!.!.!. their pretty much underneath yours in the poetry section =)Www@QuestionHome@Com Its Ok but poetry does not have to be depressing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com |