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Question: A dark poem, enjoy!!?
FALLEN
I am fallen, woe upon the world
For I am neither good nor evil
I keep no love nor do I hate
Have no passion to move me
Nor empathy to help
My heart is not warm
It is cold as stone
Solid and immobile to suffering
Though once known I wander alone
A pariah, cursed, empty
For those who draw close to me
I am a sink that draws them down
Their love is drained from them
Joy is sapped and happiness lost to darkness
and Hope, the last anchor, withers
Till remorse and hollowness are all that live
Sadly, I know it not for I am blind
Touching without feeling
Void of conscience
With darkened eyes I seek and cannot see
With dull ears I am ignorant of song
A sotted mind incapable of reason
I step to move but make no way
For time has ended
Satan has claimed his prize
Steven Brooks 7/11/2008Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
have you ever read the book a wrinkle in time!? you sounded like someone that had been taken by 'IT'!.!.!.!. VERY good poem!.!.!. you made me think of you as a black vacuum!.!.!. no light at all!.!.!. no substance!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
With how well written the first stanza was, I believed the rest would also be as well written!. But no!. There are many contradictory terms used in this poem that make no sense and are the reason I don't care for it!. If you're 'neither good nor evil', then why do you drain all of the love and sap all the joy!? also, if you're not evil, why does the devil want you!? The first and last stanza are great and gave me chills!. Eliminate the second stanza or rewrite it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
satan has claimed his prize!.!.!.!.!.very cool
overall very dark imagery and a good sense of what you were feeling when you wrote this!.!.!. I like it alot
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Interesting! it gave me chillsWww@QuestionHome@Com
awesome! i loved it:)Www@QuestionHome@Com
that is a beatiful poem its very close to home ive felt that way along timeWww@QuestionHome@Com