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Question: What do you think of this poem!? (i wrote it)!?
***why did this happen to me!?***
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why did this happen to me!?

i made no mistake

should i suck it up!?

i did nothin wrong

gotta take it in

however i can

life aint nothin

unless you spend it

with people that value you

i wont let mine end

for a stupid decision

that someone made

its their loss

not mine

theyll come back

once they see what they lost

once they see reality

begging

sayin sorry

for all the **** they did and said

i just kow they will

now i know

though i made no mistake

this is a test

to see if ill do whats right

to see if ill forgive

and forget

though i know i cant

ill suck it up

take it in

and do the best i can

now i know

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Well, poems don't have to rhyme (slap across the face), and the meaning is obvious if you actually bother to read it!.!.!. but it kinda seems more like you're venting than writing a poem!. Maybe if you worked on the rhetoric, grammar and punctuation (which do really help poems flow and make more sense) it would be better!. But writing is a great way to vent and figure out who you are in life, so keep it up :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

all poems do not have to rhyme, haikus don't rhyme! cinquain's don't rhyme! They go ny syllables, or # of words!.
it is an okay poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's a bit boring, rambling, and pointless!. Sorry!. It might make a nice rap song but a poem!?!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

First of all it doesnt rhyme
Second what is the poem suppose to mean
Third i got board through the the beggining
So i didnt finish reading

WHAT IM SAYING IS IT SUCKSWww@QuestionHome@Com

One of the best i have ever heard =]Www@QuestionHome@Com

honestly, ( I'm not bein mean ) it's quite simple and lame!.Www@QuestionHome@Com