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I burn
From an inner flame
Writhing
Sleep will not be captured this night!.
My breath in spurts of anguish
My core surely cooked well!.
No water quenches these flames
Of the heart!.
Perhaps I shouldn't have had that last burrito!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Great - the ending brought humor (and a smile) on an - otherwise - another depressing heading poem!. I love it when I read something uplifting!. There is so much being said about loss and despair - that frivolity is a very welcome difference!. Keep up the good work ?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Where water fails,
turn away and seek help from
the pow'r and might of Gaviscon
What a feeeeling!.!.!.!
Flames quenched; burrito beaten!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

how insightfull!!!
very profound ending!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.this would have made D H Lawrence cry in his grave!.!.!.!.!.it sure made me weep!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!. im a changed man after reading your poem!.!.!.!.!.!.!.nothing will be the same again!.!.!.!.sob!.!.!.sigh!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

A Tequila Sunrise,
a Burrito Nightmare!.
Plop plop, fizz fizz,
where is that little guy
when you need him!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Ahaha!
Nice!.
I like that it was all serious, but you ended with a humurous sentence!.

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I like it!Www@QuestionHome@Com

kewl!!! and funny!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

lose the burrito partWww@QuestionHome@Com

Burritos will do it! Hope your heartburn has subsided!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

too funny!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

LOL!.!.!.!.really cute, you know better than to eat mexican before bed time!Www@QuestionHome@Com

just buy a meal from Mc donalds with out trying to cookWww@QuestionHome@Com

kind of suckish but made me irrataed and chuckle a little bit!. good jobWww@QuestionHome@Com