Every step I made
seemed to talk,
liked crushed dead leaves
beneath my feet!.
Howling trees
that waved,
wanting my footprints
to be swayed!.
But I'm walking
I will walk still,
through your twisted path
and bitter pill!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
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Position:Home>Poetry> Well hope you like this comments welcome?Question: Well hope you like this comments welcome!? Every step I made
seemed to talk, liked crushed dead leaves beneath my feet!. Howling trees that waved, wanting my footprints to be swayed!. But I'm walking I will walk still, through your twisted path and bitter pill!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: REALLY GOOD but please tell in what sense are you using word bitter pill!. THANKYOUWww@QuestionHome@Com That poem is good, it seems to me that you are trying to describe a hard journey that you had to take, you didn't want to do anything wrong so you trod lightly, but in the end though you found it difficult, you made it through!. I may be wrong but that was my interpretation, everyones will be different!. Please tell me what you intended it to mean! Thanks, :)Www@QuestionHome@Com It's very good, but it's so deep yet so simple!. iF YOU WANT IT TO BE A DEEP,EMOTIONAL POEM THEN MAKE IT A LITTLE MORE WORDY, BUT i LIKE IT!. oops sorry about the caps locks!Www@QuestionHome@Com it was ok until i got to the last line!. how can you walk through a bitter pill!? it doesn't make sense!.Www@QuestionHome@Com like it!. very deep emotion!.Www@QuestionHome@Com i like itWww@QuestionHome@Com |