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Question: Fresh poem, what do you think!?
Just wrote it!. Got inspired because I told my boyfriend (jokingly) that our love was a fallacy!. Its short, but I kind of like it the way it is!. What do you think!? Should I go longer!?
Our love was a fallacy
Burried lies and
Burried lives
In a garden among the dead
The false flowers are stark
Against your granite grave
The freshly carved words
Mark your life and death
In a garden among the dead
Our unreal love rings true
The bell tolls as a wedding is through
And the widow stands aloneWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
"Fresh" is the correct term here, it was a nice read, perky and with lots of attitude, kind of gave me a feeling of "kitten with a whip", well done!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
this would be a good short song!. make it a tiny bit longer and then it will be great!.
i am 11 and here is my poem
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Good!. I love the last line so I wouldn't make it any longer!Www@QuestionHome@Com
yeah! it is really fresh and i like the way you write it!. make some more!Www@QuestionHome@Com