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Question: Judge my poem as if it were poetic idol again!?
A story so real that we can all feel
Filled with worries, sadness, and lies
A story of happiness, anger and fear
That were all forced to call life

You dont decide who your parents would be
Or the people you meet along lifes path
But ofcourse you can pick your own destiny
But the end either way is death

With diffrent begginings, middles, and ends
With diffrent parents, customs, and friends
With people, places, and beliefs to defend
Yet, through it all the end is death

A story so real that we can all feel
Filled with worries, sadness, and lies
A story with happiness, anger, and fear
Where the end!.!.!.!.!.is always we die


Its called the end is death
I wrote it 2 years ago but nobody judged seriously because i was 13 years old



I posted it yesterday but only one person reapondedWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
inspiring and both sad!.
the poem has a lot of reality to it!. your right we die anyways!.
i know how you feel i started righting poems at 12 that weren't exactly for 12 year old but its impressive!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

its a pretty good poem, but the idea is very depressing! if you believe what I believe, Death isn't the end!. id just change this line!.!.!.!.!.
You dont decide who your parents would be
Or the people you meet along lifes path
But ofcourse you can pick your own destiny
But the end either way *will come out death*Www@QuestionHome@Com

you are an amazing poet!. keep writing more and email them to me!Www@QuestionHome@Com