How would you say this does in continuing the story?

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Trial of Sight
Part Six

“Is the little witch still out”
Voices in the dark
“How did she survive your slip of finger!?”
a stranger speaks
“Her alliance to the devils around her,”
the judge
Her hands were bound,
feet tied
but spirit would not break
Her father had not given her a soul of fear
and these ManDevils would not take her

-The strangest if them all for me to write… I had to work hard not to be too repetitive!. I would love to hear your thoughts…

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It is often difficult to write a dialog - that is going on in the background - while the main character is supposed to be "out of it"!. I guess - it is because - the writer usually identifies with the main character - therefore - writing a situation of this sort - often seems strange!. Well done ?Www@QuestionHome@Com

And now there is a mysterious stranger added to the cast of characters!. It is a relief that Cara has survived and her courageous spirit seems indomitable!. I admire her!. This is dramatic and fascinating!. I am enjoying the series so much!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Well, this seems to clear the confusion, and it leaves me thirsting for more!. I hope there's more!. There damn well better be more, or I shall bring the Wrath of the Board down on thy head!. Please more! Please ma'am may I have some more!?Www@QuestionHome@Com