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Question: Would this leave you hanging if it was the last of the day!?
Trial of Sight
Part Five

Coursing pain beyond description
Cara’s skull droned in complaint
She opens her eyes
feels air upon them
only darkness stands about her
no candle lighting pit of death
no angel waiting to receive her
Could this be the Hell she so deserved!?
or cruel joke of heaven far above her!?

This is the longest of them all I think… but this part of the story needed a little more description…

Blessed Be… Even in the pits of despair, SirenWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Now this kind of confusion I like!. I don't know WHAT the hell is going on now!. This is the artist in you creating something!. Yet to ignore all the little carps, cavils, and kvetches of mine is like a racer thinking it's not important whether or not the shoe laces are tied!.So far, I like this one the best!. Maybe that's because now I am sure that I am confused!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Although it is the epitome of despair and darkness, it is also my favorite poem in the series so far!. It has a wonderful rhytnm and is very powerful!. It will be hard to wait for an alleviation of this darkness, but that is the nature of the beast!. I will be looking forward to the next!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Looking forward to this, more of the blind darling of heaven who has been plunged into hell, the poor, poor child!.Www@QuestionHome@Com