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Question: Please, Please Critique this!?
I wrote a poem for this one girl!.!.
Is there anything I should fix!?
I know the last stanza dosen't mix!.!.but I like it that way
Your presence is a dream
from which I never want to wake!.!.
And your smile, shining bright
Illuminates a cold black night
Because you're perfect
In every way
In every light!.!.
I love the way you laugh
I want to dry your tears for when you cry
It's amazing how an angel can be here of all places!.!.
And it's only you I notice, in a crowded room of faces!.!.
For You're the one my love embraces!.!.
You're sweeter than the sweetest scented rose
Such warmth you bring, could melt the whole world if it froze!.!.!.
I love your eyes
the way they shine!.!.
With rare beauty- so divine
So near and dear you are!.
so precious
So cute
So sweet
So beautiful!.
Ah- so many words to say
But three can be enough
I love you!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Wow thas really, really good!. She is very lucky :)
Great job!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
oh my gosh! that is so beautiful! somehow i feel like i wanna cry!.!. the girl you wrote this poem for is so lucky! it really touches the heart!. i don't know if there's anything to criticise about but if there is, i just can't see it!. maybe i'm just too blinded by the beautiful content of your poem!.!. sorry if this sounds corny but that's just the way i am lol!.!.!. i just know that girl is gonna love this!.!. i mean, i did anyway!.!. :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
That's awesome!. Keep writing!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Hey, nice poem~
It's a bit simple, but yeah, I think she will appreciate it~Www@QuestionHome@Com
Excellent! That's how you made it!. Just give it a title!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Thats good!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
it sounds reaaaaaaally gay, u should tell here something simple like i love ur bre4sts, something like that!.!.!. believe me!.!.!.!.
hope that helped :)Www@QuestionHome@Com