What do you think of my poem:Divorce?

Question: What do you think of my poem:Divorce!?

divorse

cant you feel me crying
cant you see the blue sky

why me!?
cant you set me free

cauz' i became so numb
i'm livin' in fright
i became so tierd
so mad that you lied

cauz' every thing i thought we would be!.!. is falling apart right in front of yoooooou

i'm just out of control
i cant be your cool
you're just killing my soul

i want divorceWww@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

This poem is very good
it sends out a message about divorce!.

The first two lines are about not showing
of feelings along with the inability of seeing the
blue sky

Going through
You are asking why me
Cant you set me free

This is talking about one person who either doesn't want a divorce or the other person torchering the other one

This is causing a lot of stress
because feeling numb
being frightened
its draining you out
leaving you tired

You are angry because of the lies
The life you looked for is coming apart at the seams!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

nice!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.

I dont think we should continue on how its going
I just cant deal with this anymore and i know its showing

Why did this have to happen to me
I cant do it anymore
i just want to be free
now that the feelings had been torn

But i want you to continue
on your ongoing course
and the paper's are on the table
I'm filing a divorce

srry i just had too

but yours it good
i just luv writing poetry
srryWww@QuestionHome@Com

I don't know!. Its a good start!. I think if you made it rhyme it would flow better!. Try again!.!.!. Just my opinionWww@QuestionHome@Com

Not so good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

sounds harsh!.Www@QuestionHome@Com