Beginning of a poem........... Thoughts?

Question: Beginning of a poem!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!. Thoughts!?

Please hold my hand
I can’t quite stand
On my feeble feet
In this crowded street
So many traps
Are trying to collapse
My morals and views
Trying to confuse
So many lies
Everyone tries
To capture my soul
Or take me wholeWww@QuestionHome@Com

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Some suggestions:
You may want to change these lines: /Are trying to collapse/ to /Trying to collapse/!. The way you did it is a bit too long!. /Or take me whole/ to /And take me whole/, /When they do persist/ to /While they persist/, and /Help me endure/ to /And help me endure/!.
Punctuation would be nice too!. Commas after: "hand", "views", "lies", "free","secure", and "tight"!. Periods after: "street", "confuse", "persist", "endure", "alright", and "whole"!.

It's perfect though-- although it rhymes throughout, it isn't cheesy or sickening!. Well done!.
They want me to be
Opening minded, “free”
And it’s hard to resist
When they do persist
Please keep me secure
Help me endure
Hold me tight
And I’ll be alrightWww@QuestionHome@Com

in this terrifying landWww@QuestionHome@Com

But back in my silence,
I return to my sense!.Www@QuestionHome@Com