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Question: Is this at all a poem or far from one!? Love in the making!.!.!.!.!?
Please provide honest opinions as I think it's a bit scetchy!?

Tittle: Love in the making

The shell of a nut is just a layer of skin,
True beauty itself, you’ll find deep within,
The sweet subtle scent, of aromatic essence,
Lynx the great African jungles, Once whence,
Open the gates of King Ramses II,
Subtle key stroke played, of the piano beckon,
Emotions run deep, through the great river Nile,
We create our own music, in such expressive style,
Sun shines over the temple doors,
Salt escapes the Nile river shores,
Amongst the sunflowers, rose buds bloom,
Dance beneath the mistletoe, bride and groom!.

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Not far at all!. The "essence" is very clear!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

its a little iffy near the end there, youre in egypt then suddenly its about roses and mistletoeWww@QuestionHome@Com

wow! that's a nice poem! I REALLY like it! it's fine the way it is! =]Www@QuestionHome@Com

some love words missing
good attemptWww@QuestionHome@Com