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Question: This is a different sorta of poem I just wrote!. What do you think!?
idk if anyone else has ever written a poem like this!.!.!. but, its about, like!. ok, well, read it first, if you have any questions, id be happy to answer them =)
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Do my lines really need to be longer!?
When my goal is simply to make you stronger
In the end, will it have mattered
If my words were a bit scattered
My ideas may be diverse
But they’d never make you worse
Why can’t you see I’m doing my best
To make sure you will come out blessed!?
The words aren’t the point
They don’t really matter
It’s the meaning behind them
That can build up or shatter
I’m trying so hard
To pull down my guard
Or share a dream
To the extreme
To bless a soul
Just another goal
I want it to be
Special, you see
Worthwhile your time
Reading my rhyme
That could possibly succeed
Or change a heart, indeedWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
i don't know about the rap thing!.!. but i agree with you!.!. it's not really the words, the length of the lines or even the ryhme that matters!. just the message being transmitted!.!.
well, i love it when people criticise my poems though (i've only ever made two =p) because it tells me how i can make it better!.!. it doesn't matter that someone told you to use longer lines!.!. you can decide for yourself whether to accept the advice or not!.!. because when it comes right down to it, you're the one expressing yourself, your thoughts and emotions!.
for myself, i really like this poem but i like a lot of things so don't take my word for it!.!. lol!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
That's amazing!. Rate mine!? http://answers!.yahoo!.com/question/index!?!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I think that this is good, but I don't really like rap!. I'm into longer lines with more words myself, but I think it is really good!. I can't critique though, I don't know how rap works ^^Www@QuestionHome@Com
its pretty cool; its meaningless but cool especially the rhyming not 2 easy 2 master thatWww@QuestionHome@Com
Just a selection of words in rhyme, they are meaningless, read the works of the great poets and compare,Www@QuestionHome@Com
A nicely written thought!.More clarity is required!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
i was feeling this!. i like the strength behind your words!. good ****!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I LOVE IT!Www@QuestionHome@Com
I liked it !. GreatWww@QuestionHome@Com