What's your opinion on this short poem?

Question: What's your opinion on this short poem!?

Under the Tree

You sit with me on the bench
Under our favorite tree
The magnolia swinging gracefully
In the cool breeze

We sit there without saying a word
An unspoken, unbreakable bond
Of love and friendship floating all around us

And in this moment
We are both, truly happy

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Well!.!.!.

I like the story, but the poem just doesn't match!.
Because of the rhymes!.
Some things rhyme, somethings don't, and
some rhyme in the wrong places!.

For Ex!.:
You sit with me on the bench
Under our favorite tree
The magnolia swinging gracefully
In the cool breeze

It just doesn't flow!.
But you do have nice potential because you have
good themes for your poems!.

Try opening your vocabulary, and if you use

Rhymezone!.com

You can find synonyms, rhymes, definitions, and everything!.
So you can think of better rhymes, and different words
to diversify the poem!.

I find it very helpful!.

Good Luck!.

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Easy to understand!.
I like this one:
saving all missing full of ocean
calm,bright and neat
your arm embraces me as a sleep town
my dream is beautiful and long ahead
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I think it is well done! Anything that is from your heart and spirit is a perfect poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

no dice!. no thanks!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

well i like it!.
poems could be anythinnng !Www@QuestionHome@Com