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Question: A light through darkness--Eyes of Innocence--Thoughts!?
Innocence
A rose tinted innocence
Projected through sapphire eyes
Splashing its colors
Into my grey horizon
Dimpled hands
Delicate digits
Untouched by insecurities
Its surface electrified
Sparking my numbed nerves
Your cherubic trunks
Bruised by adventure
Not held down by fear
An awkward walk
Tripped up by youth
As grown shoulders slump
From childhood taunts
Everything seems beautiful
Through your windows
Shoe impressed gum
Discarded paper
Upon cobblestone
Rainbow swirled bubbles
That eventually burst
Don’t let the malevolent shadows
Cast over you sweet child
Don’t be like me
Filled with sadness
Keep your magic
Even when others wish
To expose the illusion
You share my smile
Don’t mirror my fragility
Don’t drag those
Shoe tanned feet
Rise above darkness
Rise above me
Just leave your light on
It dances through
Your spiraled curls
Leaving iridescent trails
It makes the blackness
A little less menacingWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
If you did indeed write this, how inspiring is that and so very descriptive, with a gentleness of spirit! I loved it!! Cheers !!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
"Hi!",
I love the line 'Untouched by insecurities'!. When your first born and is a baby in your mothers arms!. you never have any insecurities or fear!. What a blissful life that is!. When growing through your childhood and into your adolescents!. any bad/traumatic experience that you have, that somehow bruises the soul can leave scares throughout your adult years!.
It's great how you displayed the emotions from child to elderly!. Very well expressed!.
WELL DONE!
Cheers!. : )Www@QuestionHome@Com
I see your drive, to keep this young woman's chasity alive!.
Though I can't help but wonder!.
Do you believe that this knowledge, will help her 'rise above darkness'!?
To death!? O Osiris, beauty in the eye's iris!.
That you tasted from that forbidden fruit,
And viewed all-knowledge!.
You are a true-living-breating example of Blake's teaching:
"The road of excess leads to the palace of wisdom!."
- Bravo, keep it up!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
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