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Question: Heart Transplant Donor revisited!. The rank amateur returneth!. Do you like it!?
Heart Donor
By Warren Domke
I’m donating my heart to you,
But I don’t think you’re sick!.
It’s been a good heart for me,
When I could make it tick!.
It’s kind of messy, needs a little ice!.
But hook it up and it’ll work real nice!.
What about me!?
Oh, I don’t know!.
I guess Doctor Jarvik
Will help me go with the flow!.
Why!?
You’ve already stolen it from me
It’s mine no more!.
I don’t need CPR
Just leave me down here on the floor!.
Sigh!!
A few minor changes to smooth it out!. also some wording changes to tone down the gallows humor part of the poem!. Now, I happen to LIKE gallows humor, but not everyone does!.
Hopefully I managed to toss the bathwater and keep the baby!.
Wha'dya think!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
You have created a multi-meaning poem that is quite a treat!.
First you have the donor part; adding Dr!. Jarvik is classic! Next you have the romantic part that "you've already stolen it from me!."
Both parts fit together well for a very nice poem!.
T!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Honestly, being like minded with you about gallows humor, I liked the original version, I really did!. This is a funny, loving poem as well, but the other one had a touch more humor, and, in some way, that made it all the more touching!. I suppose I am in the minority on this, and i am all for rewriting a poem, but, still, the original had more pathos and humor!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
The baby is still here!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
We nurses LOVE gallows humor!.!.!.if people really knew what we thought was funny!.!.!.and this is great fun!.Www@QuestionHome@Com