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Question: Just Wanted some opinions of my poem!.!.!.Please!?
A Living Hell
My vision is blurry the tears fill my eyes
My ability to love is lost within sighs
Down swoops the hawk and tears out my heart
My sprit in pieces I want to restart
I wish I could love but my life is just lies
My father has left me my mom all alone
Now with the pressure she dies with a moan
Already alone at the age of fourteen
I wish I was dead so we could reconvene
We never were that close and now I bemoan
My life is a hardship I can’t live in this hell
Sadness overwhelms me it’ll never quell
My body is weak from pain and suffering
I fall to my knees shaking and trembling
Over and done with my soul floats from its shellWww@QuestionHome@Com
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that is soooo amazing !.!. such a powerful story !.!.
i'd love to see what else you could do !.!.
good luck !.!. xxxWww@QuestionHome@Com
Hey Buddy, the poem was great!. Very touching, but you're not alone!. God is watching you, and he's waiting for you to cry out to him!.
"If My people, which are called by My name shall humble themselves and pray, and seek My face, and turn from their wicked ways, then will I hear from Heaven, and forgive their sin and will heal their lands!."
-I Chronicles 7:14
God bless!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
If these are your personal true feelings pray for strength!. Let go and let God!. It's an alright poem though!.!.!. Not the type of poem I prefer/usually read, but it's an alright poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
this is a great poem and it is so meaningful !. if you have more of them it would be great to look at themWww@QuestionHome@Com
hey, thats pretty awesome!. i used to write poetry somewhat like this- but more depressingWww@QuestionHome@Com
well written but a very sad poem!.!.!.life doesn't have to be that wayWww@QuestionHome@Com
best poem ever writen !Www@QuestionHome@Com