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Question: I have a new poem!. please tell me what you think!!?
“Feeling”
Brittany Evanko

Feeling as if I am in a perfect place, yet so lost,
Not knowing what your love will ultimately cost!.
I feel as if I have everything in the palm of my hand!.
Little does anyone know, my brain is scattered like sand!.

I don’t know what I am looking for, yet I am so lost!.
I would have never guessed our paths would cross!.
So now I reach out for your hand, with my eyes wide shut!.
Going with that small feeling, I am too afraid to ask what!.

I want someone to believe in me and see through my eyes;
To put everything out on my sleeve, having no disguise!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
WOW!!!!!! That was amazing did you really write that it's a lot better than mine! That was like the best poem ever it was filled with details and i like those words in there it is amazing!.I think its wonderful if you think its not good no worries it very good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I really like your poem! its great, the only thing i dont get is the first line of the second stanza!.!.!.if you don't know what you are looking for of course you are lost!.!.!. the "yet" doesn't quite fit!.
I give it an 8 out of 10
<3

~an average girlWww@QuestionHome@Com

i really like it but the part "with my eyes wide shut" thats the only part i think u should change!. other then tht i LOVE it!!! 9 out of 10!!! good job!Www@QuestionHome@Com

i loved it it is beautifulWww@QuestionHome@Com

You have done well!
simple yet bold!.
keep up the good work!!Www@QuestionHome@Com