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Question: Scotty & Lottie part II: do you like it so far!?
Apprehension
In the den tension builds
as dusk settles in!.!.!.
Scotty's had a taste
and he only wants more
but Lottie the innocent
isn't so sure!.!.
She's never done
this sort of thing before
The twitching and thumping
grows more intense
Scotty's mouth waters,
Lottie's tummy feels sick!.!.!.
Scotty: "Oh, wait til you see it, Lot'! It's HA-Yooooge!!"
Lottie: "I dunno Scotty, the clover right here is--"
S: "Clover shmover! You're just a big scaredy cat!"
L: "AM NOT!" (Sniff)
S: (On his knees) "Lottie pleeeease, just come with me this one time and you'll see!. I promise I'll protect you!."
L: "Well, OK, just this one time, but--"
S: "Great! C'mon, let's go!"
He reaches for her and she accepts!.!.!.Paw in paw
they leave the den!.!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
This is brilliant!.!.!.!.I wonder what a complete newcomer would make of it!.!.!.!.especially the first stanza!. (Ignore the word 'den' and you've got a pretty good description of an orgy)
(leave out !.!.!.!.this one time)
Her reply could just be 'Well, okay, just this once, but
I am waiting with baited breath!.!.!.!.you'd better not be planning to harm these poor, innocent little bunny rabbits!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Oh my skies! This is absolutely engaging and brilliant and when finished should be turned into some children's short stories!. The vivacious dialogue enables me to picture the two rabbits, the brave brother and the scared sister (please tell me she saves his cottontail somehwere up and down the line), oh, it's beautiful and lovely!. I have a friend who keeps rabbits, and I was just able to see them conspiring with noses all a wiggle!. Keep them coming!. :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
I agree the beginning of a children's book!.Waiting for next installment!.Hopping (no hoping) you will not "lettuce" wait too long!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Sounds like, the grass is greener else where, and they'll
be back! Make a good children's book with pictures, I keep thinking of Mr!. McGregor's garden!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
This is so adorableWww@QuestionHome@Com
So much fun reading this! Waiting for the third installment!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Very good!Www@QuestionHome@Com
This is gooooood!. I can't wait for the digging and flower eating!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
oh Reenie! I just love it!
nfd?Www@QuestionHome@Com
They're a pair of rascals!. I wonder what mischief they'll now get into !.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com