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Question: Nearly done!.!.!.!?
!.!.!.
I seem to be writing quite freely
Just testament to my idea
That, when I'm (on a) high or low
Fluid lyrics just seem to appear
I find that I'm happiest writing
When I'm on the aforementioned high
Guess I feel like I'm sharing, not bearing (or baring)
When I smile though my pen for a while
Don't misunderstand; I enjoy a sad (w)rite…
It's just in my happier pens
I don't feel that I'm venting, regurgitive men things
And less like I'm needing to cleanse!.
!.!.!.
(my poetic licence may be revoked or at least indorsed for that one)
D!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
very fluid and free!. Write a lot of this and then see if there's anything you can edit and impose a little discipline on!. Like the wordplay in "sharing, not bearing or baring", "sad (w)rite" and "happier pens"!. Rewrite to lose "regurgitive" (not a word and sick-making), and "aforementioned" (must be a shorter way to say it, and referencing to an earlier part of your work makes the reader's eye go back, interrupting the flow)!. This is a good start!. Write in both ways at once to make it better!. Make it flow crazy and turn on the wordplay !.!.!. then go back and see if you can edit it tighter while preserving the appealing craziness!. Thanks for writing this!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
"Hi!"
Fluid ice injected pen,
Is my true and only friend,!.
regurgitate poetic lyrics lye,
I don't remember, I'm so high!.
It's a lovely poem!.
WELL DONE! : )Www@QuestionHome@Com
Irish D - I share these moments with you!. Yesterday, everything I wrote came out as a rhyme!.!.!.with no edits!.!.!.!.what I wrote was pretty much rubbish, but you couldn't fault my metre!.
(Last line of second verse!.!.!.!.through!?)Www@QuestionHome@Com
I regurgitated your words
out they spewed
a regurgitive sharing
oh am I daring!Www@QuestionHome@Com
I'm glad you explained the regurgitive men things because I thought men had a missing A for mean!.
Good work!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
High pants and ideals!.!.!.and, for Dondi!.!.!."You should have seen the monkey trying to put the cork back in!"Www@QuestionHome@Com
This has been a day for being full of it for many of us!. All I will say is "Cute"!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
It has been a day!. Regurgitate all you wish, I promise to intervene with the Board to help you keep your poetic license!.Www@QuestionHome@Com