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Question: Your Opinions On My Poem!?
SEE MY ETERNAL ORGANS ARE SHAKING RIGHT NOW THEY'RE SHIVERING , KINDA NERVOUS CUZ YOUR IN THE ROOM LOOKIN BEAUTIFULL AND I KNOW THAT UR LISTENING, BEING HOLDING BACK THESE FEELINGS FOR SOMETIME, BUT NOW IM GONNA SEIZE THIS OPPORTUNITY TO MAKE THIS DELIVERY IN HOPES THAT IT INCREASES THE CHANCES OF STARTING SOMETHING ROMANTIC BETWEEN YOU AND ME, PLANT A SEED IN CONCRETE WATCH IT GROW INTO THE TREE IN WHICH WE CAN SIT IN AND GET CAUGHT K-I-S-S-I-N-G, OR SPEND A WHOLE DAY WRITING OUR DEEPLY FEELINGS AND EMOTIONS ON ITS LEAVES, SO WHEN THEY FALL DURING THAT SEASON PEOPLE ON THE GROUND WILL HAVE SOMETHING TO READ, IT WOULD BE SORT OF LIKE THAT BOOK "THE GIVING TREE" , OR LIKE A NEWSPAPER CALL IT THE " DAILY LEAF" WITH HEADLINES LIKE " SHE IS DEEPLY ROOTED IN ME", SEE WHAT I'VE REALIZED IS THAT ITS NO QUESTION IM TALL ENOUGH TO REACH THE STARS WITH MY FINGERTIPS, AND YOUR SHORT ENOUGH TO REACH MY HEART WHETHER ITS WITH UR HANDS OR YOUR ART, NO NEED TO STAND ON THE TIPS OF YOUR TOES WHEN I PLANT A KISS ON THAT INSTRUMENT BELOW UR NOSE, WHICH PLAYS SUCH POETIC MUSIC THAT FLOWS, GOT ME DROWNING IN YOU LIKE A RIVER, AND I DON'T EVEN KNOW TO SWIM SO IM PREPARED TO GO WHEREVER IT GOES, JUST WISH I'D KNEW I WOULD BE GETTING BAPTISED IN YOU, WOULD'VE WORE SUM DIFFERENT CLOTHES, CAUSE IM DRIPPING THE SOLES OF MY SHOES ARE WET I JUST HOPE UR THERE TO CATCH ME WHEN IM SLIPPING AND WHETHER ITS IN A FREESTYLE WITH DREW AND ROBIN AT AN OPEN MIC OR IN VERSE ON A PIECE OF PAPER THAT WAS JUST WRITTEN, I GOT LEONARDO DI VINCI'S SPIRIT WHEN IT COMES TO PAINTING PICTURES I AM GIFTED, SEE I WROTE THIS TO CONFESS LIKE USHER HOW I WAS FEELINGWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I see this has romance in it!.
The poem is beautiful
I know you're listening being holding back
I would change the previous line to either
(while holding back the feelings
or ( because the feelings are being suppressed!.)

Between you and me ( between you and I as we plant a seed )
I didn't even know swim
(I didn't even know how to swim)Www@QuestionHome@Com

i don't even want to read it because of how it is written!.!.!. write it out better and i'll tell you what it think!. With poems appearance is important!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

They are actually well made!. But i would think it was a song not a poem!. Good luck!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I've been writing songs which are like poems, for 3 years now and I must your lyrics are strong and beautiful!. This is a very beautiful poemWww@QuestionHome@Com

BeautifulWww@QuestionHome@Com

Wow, it's nice!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Its really longWww@QuestionHome@Com

its a nice poem great job :DWww@QuestionHome@Com