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Question: Poem silence is golden!?
Silence is golden !.
Body language speaks !.
Winds blowing my thoughts !.
From were my window creaks !.

Someplace a child is learning !.
Spreading wings in translucent ways !.
Looking at the world threw my rear view !.
Personality freezes like a statue in haze !.

As the world turns I change !.
Dropping traits like autumn leaves !.
Rising to new heights like december clouds !.
Its becoming clear what I must achieve !.

Fate is a unintroduced friend or foe !.
Its end result is determined by "you" !.
Doubt is the destruction to ones mind !.
Faith reassures that such ones are true !.

Silence is golden !.
Sometimes the world leaves me weak !.
At times I play my part !.
In sentences were I don't speak !.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I'm assuming you wrote this poem, and you want to be critqued!. In my opinion, the poem is very choppy, and it doesn't flow very well!. The stanzas seperately are nice, but they don't make very much sense together!. And every sentence ends in a period, which is why its so choppy I think!. With some reworking it could turn into a gem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

There are some solid bits of poetry in here!. You have talent and a good eye!. I try not to rely too much on old standards like "As the world turns" and "Silence is golden!." Overall, this is not bad!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

im impressed!.!.!.very good!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com